Advanced Writing

Email Etiquette Assignment

Original Submission:

Email 1 (To a potential employer)

Subject Line: Application for Summer 2020 Balzer+Bray’s Editorial Internship

Dear Dr. Smeller,

I’m writing to apply for the Balzer+Bray’s Editorial Internship for summer 2020.

My current job as a content producer for the Rambler Media Group gives me experience as a copywriter, layout and graphics designer, photographer, and social media writer. With my news writing skills, I’m able to summarize key points clearly and concisely. I can also set the scene writing book jacket hooks with my feature writing skills. Working news also has me used to working on different projects at the same time as well as promoting my content on social media on both professional and personal accounts.

In my previous role as editor-in-chief, I lead the editorial and general meetings and later communicated the important notes over email. My main role as an editor was to decide which stories to publish on which platform as well as copy edit stories and give writing tips to newer writers. I’ve also gotten practice critiquing writing outside of journalistic writing with my creative writing classes at Wesleyan.

Growing up, I was known as the girl who always had her face in books — until I was the one creating them. Storytelling is the passion I keep coming back to whether I’m the reader, writer, artist, or editor. As a senior communication major with an addiction to reading teen fiction novels, I’ve enjoyed telling the story of Texas Wesleyan, but it’s time for me to turn the page. Therefore, I’d like to demonstrate my passion for books in an interview for the Balzer + Bray Editorial Internship for June 2020. Please contact me at 817-932-4601 to schedule one.

Thank you for your time,

Hannah Onder

Content Producer for The Rambler Media Group

Mass Communication major at Texas Wesleyan University

hlonder@txwes.edu

817-932-4601

 

Email 2 (To a business or professional associate)

Subject Line: Interview for The Rambler about Diversity in Literature Story

Hello Dr. Smeller,

I’m contacting you about a time I could interview you this week for a diversity in literature feature I’m working on for The Rambler.

I feel you would be a qualified to speak on the topic because of your experience teaching Topics in American Literature with on a focus on Hispanic literature, which has drawn in students outside of the English major or minor.

I’m available to talk Monday after 12 p.m. or Thursday after 11 a.m. Let me know a time that works for you.

Thank you for your time,

Hannah Onder

hlonder@txwes.edu

817-932-4601

 

Email 3 (To a friend or family member)

Subject Line: Celebration at Ben’s Tonight @ 7 p.m.

Hey Dr. Smeller,

How’s your week going? I’ve been having a productive one. 😄

I’m planning a celebration tonight for finishing my Hootsuite certification. After staring at a computer screen for 5 hours, I need some time away from screens. 😬

Do you want to meet me at Ben’s Triple B’s tonight at 7 p.m.? 🙏

See you later,

Hannah

 

Revised Submission:

Email 1 (To a potential employer)

Subject Line: Application for Summer 2020 Balzer+Bray’s Editorial Internship

Dear HarperCollins Publishers,

I’m writing to apply for the Balzer+Bray’s Editorial Internship for summer 2020.

My current job as a content producer for the Rambler Media Group gives me experience as a copywriter, layout and graphics designer, photographer, and social media writer. With my news writing skills, I’m able to summarize key points clearly and concisely. I can also set the scene writing book jacket hooks with my feature writing skills. Working news also has me used to working on different projects at the same time as well as promoting my content on social media on both professional and personal accounts.

In my previous role as editor-in-chief, I lead the editorial and general meetings and later communicated the important notes over email. My main role as an editor was to decide which stories to publish on which platform, as well as to copy edit stories and to give writing tips to newer writers. I’ve also gotten practice critiquing writing outside of journalistic writing with my creative writing classes at Wesleyan.

Growing up, I was known as the girl who always had her face in books — until I was the one creating them. Storytelling is the passion I keep coming back to whether I’m the reader, writer, artist, or editor. As a senior communication major with an addiction to reading teen fiction novels, I’ve enjoyed telling the story of Texas Wesleyan, but it’s time for me to turn the page. Therefore, I’d like to demonstrate my passion for books in an interview for the Balzer + Bray Editorial Internship for June 2020. Please contact me at 817-932-4601 to schedule one.

Thank you for your time,

Hannah Onder

Content Producer for The Rambler Media Group

Mass Communication major at Texas Wesleyan University

hlonder@txwes.edu

817-932-4601

 

Email 2 (To a business or professional associate)

Subject Line: Interview for The Rambler about Diversity in Literature Story

Hello Dr. Smeller,

I’m contacting you about a time I could interview you this week for a diversity in literature feature I’m working on for The Rambler.

I feel you would be qualified to speak on the topic because of your experience teaching Topics in American Literature with on a focus on Hispanic literature, which has drawn in students outside of the English major or minor.

I’m available to talk Monday after 12 p.m. or Thursday after 11 a.m. Let me know a time that works for you.

Thank you for your time,

Hannah Onder

hlonder@txwes.edu

817-932-4601

 

Email 3 (To a friend or family member)

Subject Line: Celebration at Ben’s Tonight @ 7 p.m.

Hey Alanna,

How’s your week going? I’ve been having a productive one. 😄

I’m planning a celebration tonight for finishing my Hootsuite certification. After staring at a computer screen for 5 hours, I need some time away from screens. 😬

Do you want to meet me at Ben’s Triple B’s tonight at 7 p.m.? 🙏

Your Friend,

Hannah

 

Brief Editing Notes:

The main edit I did was change who the emails were addressed to. I initially had them all of them addressed to my professor since we were sending them to him for this assignment, but since it was kind of confusing I switched one and three to people I’d actually be addressing. I also corrected some small grammar mistakes in one and two and changed the salutation in three because it was kind of unusual.

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